My Love for Reeses Cups
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Have you ever thought of what your favorite candy bar in the whole world would be? It is a hard decision. Oh, how I love Reeses cups! Can you believe there is even a cereal based on them. What is there to complain about Reeses cups? It is a delightful treat with chocolate spilled on top, and creamy peanut butter filling. Sometimes I have a desire for Reeses that I would quickly throw on my coat and buy a king size pack. To see some one buy Reeses, makes me smile. Are you as crazy as me about something like a candy bar???
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brunsmana
on March 7, 2006 at 10:36 PM
Patty,Interesting topic and conclusion sentence. Great fluency.
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lingering words: .5/1
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powerful verbs, specific nouns & adjectives: 1/1
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Total: 8.5/10
Good work,
Mrs. Brunsman
