Entries "February 2006":
Wednesday, February 22, 2006
The peice that I think was the best was Sensory Detailed- chilled 2. My peice had varied sentence beginnings, it had descriptive adjectives, verbs, and it starts with ing words and lingers in ytour mind. the mechanics were no spelling mistakes and the commas were in the correct spot.
Sensory detailed- chilled was the worst of all of the peices that I wrote. The sentence fluency was to long and the word choise I did not have enough descriptive words. I had no grammer or spelling mistakes.
In the future I wish to work on making my sentences shorter by having 2 in each entry and making my sentences with more clarity. Also, I want to make 2 sentences shorter in each entry, 1 compound sentence per entry and I want to be more specific, measureable, achieveable,reachable, and trackable.
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Wednesday, February 15, 2006
February 8,2006
Dear Madeline,
I miss you so much. I had the best time when we went to your house in Beaver Creek. It was so much fun when we had a sleep over and we didn?t go to bed until 5:00 in the morning. I wish we could do it again.
Maybe we can do it again, but at my house and we could invite are old friends from Loveland and then go swimming in my pool. Have you talked to Katie lately? I think she move d because when I called they said that I had the wrong number so I tried again and it was the same number.
Hope to hear from you soon. You can give me a call, and we can catch up from where we left off.
Your Best Friend forever,
Ali
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