Thank You Letter
Comments: 3
3/8/2006
Dear Dominic,
Thank you for taking care of me when I was sick at home and when mom and dad need to work. When you came home from school the first thing you did was give me a hug. When I was lonesome you would come in and sit with me and make sure I was at ease. Things you did for me were: getting me tea when my throat was aching. Another time was when I was in terrible pain you would make sure I was o.k. For those reasons you made my day. I could not ask for a better brother than you.
Love You,
Ali
Dear Dominic,
Thank you for taking care of me when I was sick at home and when mom and dad need to work. When you came home from school the first thing you did was give me a hug. When I was lonesome you would come in and sit with me and make sure I was at ease. Things you did for me were: getting me tea when my throat was aching. Another time was when I was in terrible pain you would make sure I was o.k. For those reasons you made my day. I could not ask for a better brother than you.
Love You,
Ali
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alexandrap
on March 8, 2006 at 2:01 PM
Ali~2/2 Blog is written as a friendly letter.
2/2 Includes date, salutation, etc.
2/2 Body includes opening thank you statement and "cohesive" paragraph.
1/2 Good word choice- needed different sentence beginnings.
2/2 Edited for grammar/ spelling.
9/10 Total
Great Job! Your brother sounds really nice. (Lucky!)
brunsmana
on March 15, 2006 at 2:57 PM
Ali,Cute letter. It is always nice to thank a sibling for their kindness. Next time try to avoid listing by starting your sentence with the "things you did for me."
Is a thank you letter 2/2
Included all 5 components 2/2
Included a thank you statement for your topic sentence & a cohesive paragraph with supporting details 2/2
Varying sentence beginnings, strong word choices, connected thoughts 1/2
Correct grammar conventions 2/2
Good work,
Mrs. Brunsman
jtubbs
on April 20, 2006 at 12:25 PM
Hopefully my kids will care for each other like that when they get sick.