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Summaries-Edited Again

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The rain forest is beautiful and needs to be saved. The rain forest is getting crowded because the Brazilian government told the people to move to the forest. Searching for gold, miners came to the rain forest. When they came, the miners brought diseases such as malaria, influenza, and whooping cold with them.  With all the current problems, farmers and loggers cut down the trees, making it just worse. Already there are 10,000 square miles gone of the forest, that is 20% gone.  Although the Amazon Region is a protected area, it will only protect about 12% of the rain forest. If the Brazilian government keeps on making wrong decisions, then in a few years they will have no more rain forest.


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brunsmana on May 10, 2006 at 10:13 AM
Jess,
Excellent focus pays off...great work and effort. You made improvements that made your summary more clear.
2/2 listed the main ideas in the first sentence
2/2 details support the main idea in the first sentence
2/2 supporting details are written in sequence
2/2 summary is brief
1/2 includes facts instead of opinions
2/2 rephrased author�s words
3/3 correct spelling
3/3 complete sentences with varying beginnings
3/3 followed grammar rules
Total: 20/21 points
Great work!!!
Mrs. Brunsman

   

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