Summary #3
Comments: 1
The Yanomami people may lose the forest in the future. Since roads were built many loggers came in and cut down large areas of trees. Resently the incline in soy farming made things worse. Many loggers were cutting down the forest, and miners mining for their gold. Diseases such as malaria, influenza, and whooping cough caused the villagers lives. Then in 1991 Brazil set aside 36,000 square miles of land for the Yanomami people.
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brunsmana
on May 10, 2006 at 9:53 AM
Matt,Better use of transition words.
2/2 listed the main ideas in the first sentence
1/2 details support the main idea in the first sentence
1/2 supporting details are written in sequence
1/2 summary is brief
2/2 includes facts instead of opinions
2/2 rephrased author?s words
3/3 correct spelling
3/3 complete sentences with varying beginnings
3/3 followed grammar rules
Total: 18/21 points
You could have included more details.
Mrs. Brunsman
