Friendly letter
Comments: 2
Dear Grandpa,
Thank you for inspiring me in science. You have taught me so much, and whenever we have a science test or project I know what to do. Thank you for teaching me math and other things. You are all ways there for everything even with sports and projects. Everything you do it makes me laugh or go ohhhhhhhh! But even with your snotty jokes, but they still make me laugh. So thank you for your help and time with everything you’ve done for me. I wish you were still hear because I miss you so much.
Thank you for inspiring me in science. You have taught me so much, and whenever we have a science test or project I know what to do. Thank you for teaching me math and other things. You are all ways there for everything even with sports and projects. Everything you do it makes me laugh or go ohhhhhhhh! But even with your snotty jokes, but they still make me laugh. So thank you for your help and time with everything you’ve done for me. I wish you were still hear because I miss you so much.
Your grandson,
Josh Sagan
Josh Sagan
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joshl
on March 8, 2006 at 2:09 PM
Josh your paragraph started out thanking your granpa about science but then you started talking about jokes and math and you went off topic.You also should try to get longer sentences in 6/10 
jtubbs
on April 20, 2006 at 3:21 PM
Josh,What a nice letter! Josh L is right though, you did wonder off topic a little. Your first sentence should have said something like "Thank you for being a wonderful grandpa."
--Is a thank you letter 2/2
--Included all 5 components 2/2
--Included a thank you statement for your topic sentence & a cohesive paragraph with supporting details 1/2
--Varying sentence beginnings, strong word choices, connected thoughts 2/2
Correct grammar conventions 2/2
Total 9/10
Good work,
Mr. Tubbs
