summary 2
Comments: 1
Many concerned people are fighting for the destruction of the
Amazon rain forest. When the Yahnomami moved to the rainforest, that
is when the destruction began. They started to build roads, cut down
trees, and sawmills were built. Many people realized the destruction
and started to help. The Brazilian government set out 36,000 square miles for the
Yahomami. The biggest problem was 10,00 square miles cut down alone in
2004. Since soy farming has become popular, more roads are being built
deeper into the forest. Despite the loss so far, Brazil and other
organizations are working together to help and save the rainforest.
You need to log in to Grade 5 in order to comment on this entry.
Back to entries
brunsmana
on May 3, 2006 at 10:02 AM
Marytess,Your summary is brief, but good. Well written topic sentence. Please add a smooth transition between sentence 1 and 2. Also, sentence 2 needs to be reworded to make it more clear. Check the sequence of your sentences. Either they're out of order or you need some transitions between them.
Thanks
Mrs. Brunsman