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Summary 3

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    Many concerned people are fighting against the destruction of the Amazon rain forest.  Years ago, the Yahnomami moved to the rainforest and that is when the destruction of the rainforest began.  They started to build roads, cut down trees, and build sawmills.  Many people realized the loss of the rainforest because of the Yahnomami and started to help out.  For example, the Brazilian government set out 36,000 square miles for the Yahomami only.  That was so they had only their designated land to do their own thing on.  The biggest problem though, was 10,00 square miles cut down in 2004 alone.  Since soy farming has become popular, more roads are being built deeper into the forest.  Despite the loss so far, Brazil and other organizations are working together to help and save the rainforest.

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brunsmana on May 10, 2006 at 10:04 AM
Marytess,
Excellent improvements. Adding transitions made your summary more clear to the reader.
2/2 listed the main ideas in the first sentence
2/2 details support the main idea in the first sentence
2/2 supporting details are written in sequence
2/2 summary is brief
2/2 includes facts instead of opinions
2/2 rephrased author�s words
2/3 correct spelling
2/3 complete sentences with varying beginnings
3/3 followed grammar rules
Total: 20/21 points
Well done,
Mrs. Brunsman

   

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