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The piece that I consider to be
my best six-trait piece is "She Made a Bracelet". I used many
different sentence beginnings, and sentences of many different lengths.
Many of my word choices made pictures in my mind as I re-read it, and
they seemed very descriptive. I could almost hear the girls
talking! Also, I have no grammatical errors. (Yes!) I believe it
is a good article.
"Sensory Details:Restlessness" is
the piece that most puts me to shame. There is no sentence fluency-
every sentence is overflowing and crammed with nearly useless words.
This brings me to my word choices. The words do not fit the title and
create-not pictures- but a feeling of immense boredom. Probably, I have
grammatical errors, but I did not chance upon any. Oh, well. In every
other respect, this article is a despicable disgrace!
In the future, I will use the SMART
method to improve the clarity of my sentence fluency, and vary my
sentence beginnings. At least one sentence will begin with an adverb in
every blog entry. This goal is-I believe- measurable and
achievable.
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