I planted flowers.
Comments: 2
There are many different types and varieties of
flowers. Planting flowers in her back yard is what Anna loves to
do. She planted flowers all over her gorgeous yard. To
plant flowers is like taking medicine for a distressing headache.
It works as a cure. Many times after work Anna has a bad
headache. She sits down on her vibrant green chair in her
backyard with a glass of chilling lemonade next to her, just in
case she becomes parched, and plants away. Anna may not be able
to walk, but she sure can plant in peace.
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brunsmana
on January 10, 2006 at 11:09 PM
Mary Tess,Great topic sentence. Great fluency. One sentence leads to the next. (2 points) Good sentence length variety. (2 points) Very detailed, especially the lemonade. It makes me wonder why Anna can't walk. Good use of grammar conventions (2 points) Continue to vary your sentence beginnings. (2 points) Excellent blog entry, Mrs. Brunsman
marytessi
on January 11, 2006 at 1:32 PM
Mary Tess,Your total should be 8/8. Good work!!!
