Entries "February 2006":
Wednesday, February 22, 2006
My best piece is She Worked Out. My sentences are at a good length, and have good beginings such as ing words, and adverbs. They also have compound sentences in them, and are very descriptive. My word choice is good because the words linger in your mind, and they are very descriptive. I do not have any spelling errors.
A piece that I need to work on is my Sensory details. The sentence fluency was not very good, because I didn't start sentences with ing words, or adverbs, and most of the sentences started with the. My word choice was ok because I used very descriptive words, but I did not use words that lingered in your mind. This piece does not have any spelling errors, or grammar errors.
My goal is to work on sentence begginnings. I will try to use at least one sentence with an adverb or an ing word in each of my blog entries.
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Wednesday, February 8, 2006
2/8/06
Dear Meredith,
It was so much fun when we went to San Diego together! I had a lot of fun at are hotel resort right on the side of the beach. And remember when we wore our matching swim suites to the pool, and everybody thought we were twins! That was so cool! It was really fun when we went to that one shore side restaurant. What was it called again? Oh yeah, it was ?Funky Monkey Burgers.? They had the best food in all of California! We have to go to that restaurant again together, the next time we?re in California.
We should get together sometime. How about Hawaii the n ext time we are together! That is where my mom is dying to visit, so we could easily get a plane ride and hotel there! I think it would be a lot of fun. Let me know if it sounds fun to you also.
Hope to see you soon. You can call me anytime, my number is 513-821-7702. You can also write a letter to me. My address is, 459 Livington Road.
Your Cousin,
Olivia
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