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I chose my Restaurant entry about McDonalds as my best one.The sentence fluency is very could because I have different sentence beginning like -ing words and verbs etc. My woed choice included many short and long words, and words that you don't normally see. My grammar didn't have any mistakes.
    My worst one was Lackadaicial/Monkey. I chose it because there were many run-on sentences but my writing did "flow" a little bit. My word choice was not very exciting. I just used average words. My mechanics weren't very good, I had unneaded words and I forgot some words in some places.
    My goal is to improve on my organization skills. I'm not very good at putting the right stuff in at the right time so some of my work is pretty confusing. Also, I write my stuff like I'm goin to read and grade it, or I don't put in the obvious details for me, but unheard of details for the real reader. So that's why I nead to improve on my organization skills so my work is more understandable.

2/7/06


Dear Butch,

    
    I was hoping that you could come with me and my family around the world during the summer. We’ll be going to Portugal, then Spain to Paris. Then down to Italy and to Egypt, then fly to Hong Kong. From there we will fly to California and then back to Ohio.
    I really would like to spend some time with you because you’ve been in Colorado working all year and we’ve never had a chance to see each other. We could go scuba diving in Portugal and Spain; we could go to the Eiffel Tower and the Louve. It would be so much fun if we were together for once and not be so far away.
     You know how to get in touch with me. Try to call before school’s out if you want the family package.

                                   
                                    Your Brother,


        Jack