Summary part-two
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The Amazon rain forest is being destructed, but
concerned people are trying to save it. In the 1960�s, the Brazilian
government told the poor people to live in the rainforest. This brought
roads, loggers, and sawmills to the rainforest. More people began to be concerned about
the loss of the rain forest. In 1991, Brazil saved 36,000 square miles
of the land for the Yahnomami, the natives to the land. In the year 2004, almost 10,000 square
miles were cut down. Some experts estimate that in the last few years,
more than twenty percent of the Amazon was cut down. Since soy farming
has become more popular, more people are building roads are clearing
the Amazon to find soy. Working with the WWF and the ARPA, Brazil is trying to save the Amazon. They are preserving at
least twelve percent of the rain forest now which is about the size of California.
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jtubbs
on April 28, 2006 at 10:55 PM
Ari, Overall, your summary is pretty good. Here are some suggestions to make it better: (1) Rain forest are being destroyed, not destructed. (2) You need to add some details about mining of gold. (3) Correct this sentence" "...more people are building roads are clearing the..."
brunsmana
on May 3, 2006 at 9:22 AM
Ari-Excellent vocabulary. Good transitional words and sentnece beginnings. Make the changes Mr. Tubbs suggested. Then you can respond to other people's blogs, add to posted stories, or read a new story and write a new summary as a blog entry.
Good work,
Mrs. Brunsman