Friendly Letter
Comments: 6
2/8/06
Dear Meredith,
It was so much fun when we went to San Diego together! I had a lot of fun at are hotel resort right on the side of the beach. And remember when we wore our matching swim suites to the pool, and everybody thought we were twins! That was so cool! It was really fun when we went to that one shore side restaurant. What was it called again? Oh yeah, it was �Funky Monkey Burgers.� They had the best food in all of California! We have to go to that restaurant again together, the next time we�re in California.
We should get together sometime. How about Hawaii the n ext time we are together! That is where my mom is dying to visit, so we could easily get a plane ride and hotel there! I think it would be a lot of fun. Let me know if it sounds fun to you also.
Hope to see you soon. You can call me anytime, my number is 513-821-7702. You can also write a letter to me. My address is, 459 Livington Road.
Your Cousin,
Olivia
Olivia
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olivias
on February 8, 2006 at 8:37 PM
sorry, in the second paragraph it says n ext, it is supposed to be next. sorry!!
arie
on February 13, 2006 at 6:27 PM
This is a very good entrie Olivia!!!!! Way to keep it in friendly letter form!!!~Ari~
marytessi
on February 15, 2006 at 1:55 PM
2/15/06Dear Olivia,
Way to stay to the friendly letter form. You definatley know the parts of a friendly letter! Good job at staying true to the friendly letter form and you did great with your paragraphs. I think that after yiu finish that you should check for grammar and spelling errors. Other than that, i think that you did a great job. I really enjoyed reading the friendly letter!
From,
Mary Tess
marytessi
on February 15, 2006 at 1:56 PM
2/15/06Dear Olivia,
Way to stay to the friendly letter form. You definatley know the parts of a friendly letter! Good job at staying true to the friendly letter form and you did great with your paragraphs. I think that after yiu finish that you should check for grammar and spelling errors. Other than that, i think that you did a great job. I really enjoyed reading the friendly letter!
From,
Mary Tess
marytessi
on February 15, 2006 at 1:57 PM
Sorry, but you got an 9/10!!!!!!! Good kob!!!!!!!Mary Tess Irvine
brunsmana
on March 8, 2006 at 8:13 AM
Olivia,This is an excellent friendly letter. You have the perfect tone. Remember to edit for homonyms such as "our" vs. "are."
Blog entry is written as a friendly letter 2/2
Friendly letter includes all 5 components 2/2
The body of your letter contains 3 paragraphs with 3 sentences in
each paragraph. 2/2
Your letter contains the components of organization 2/2
Correct use of grammar conventions .5/2
Total 9.5/10
Great work,
Mrs. Brunsman