Friendly Letter
Comments: 3
2/8/05
Dear Mary,
It was so much when you came here for winter break! I had a lot of fun because you stayed at my house the whole time you were in town. Ice-skating together was exciting because we kept falling down for no reason! Remember when we went to go see The Lion the Witch and the Wardrobe? We were reciting lines from the movie all week! That was a lot of fun. Especially since we didn�t have British accents. Also, remember how we kept eating all of those shrimp at grandpa�s house? That was hilarious! We were eating about five pieces a minute!
I can�t wait until we see each other in the summertime! We should start to plan your visit here and keep in touch so we could plan things to do. What if we went to a water park, or if we go to another movie? How about if you stay at my house again? I can�t wait until you come!
Write to me soon. My address is 458 Livington Rd. Or you can call me at 513-784-9942, my email is [email protected]. I can�t wait to here from you and talk about our next visit!
Your cousin,
Ari
Ari
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olivias
on February 8, 2006 at 8:42 PM
~Ari~Good job on writing this paper. It looks like a regular friendly letter to me. Good job.
~Livi~
alexandrap
on February 15, 2006 at 1:47 PM
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2/15/05Dear Ari~
I enjoyed reading your letter. It is very good. The fake address and email are hilarious! HawaiinChocolate?
You did everything you were supposed to. There weren't any mistakes(that I saw), and it was relaxed and entertaining. I loved reading about all the fun stuff you did with your cousin. It sounds like the two of you had a fabulous time!
Great job- you followed all the rules and made it fun, too! Fantastic job on your letter. I hope you like this letter!
Sincerely,
Alexandra
P.S. You get all of the points, don't worry.
brunsmana
on March 8, 2006 at 10:49 AM
Ari,Excellent blog entry. Very practical and creative. I agree with Alexandra's comments. Your sentences are well written and you include varying beginnings even though that wasn't on the rubric. Your topic sentence in paragraph one could use some clarification.
Blog entry is written as a friendly letter 2/2
Friendly letter includes all 5 components 2/2
The body of your letter contains 3 paragraphs with 3 sentences in
each paragraph. 2/2
Your letter contains the components of organization 1.5/2
Correct use of grammar conventions 2/2
Total 9.5/10
Excellent work,
Mrs. Brunsman